Sta.sh
“Curtain Call”
On a corner of a block lies a theater with a stage
For twenty dollars audiences sit like mice in a cage
Watching actors personify characters they are not
Understanding metaphors and subtle nuisances in plots
Except for this play the actors have vanished
Craving an encore the audience is famished
The actors have taken leave; the director walked out the door
The orchestra section is empty for they will play no more
There is no phantom; there is no opera
The sopranos can not sing; the tenors concur
The scripts are ripped, the actors have no direction
The villains have quit for they lack motivation
The curtains are burned, the stage lights are broken
No money has been earned for the critics have spoken
This play has no title nor scenery encased
The props that were vital have now been misplaced
With a final curtain call the actors spread out
They kneel with disgrace and quietly take bow
Yet to this disaster I stand and applaud
Because this play is by no means a tragedy or fraud
Acting is all about honesty and it always has been
The best actors express feelings deep from within
Only the best actors courageous and bold
Can preserve under conditions outrageous and cold
And we’re all actors in reality at the end of the day
But some do it in front of a camera while others are waylaid
And so to those actors who express feelings so blue
I have nothing but respect to those with feelings so true
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great work.
The main thing for me is the lack of punctuation in some spots. For example, line 12: "The sopranos can not sing the tenors concur", I would put a comma between 'sing' and 'the', or even a semi-colon, if you wanted to make it two separate thoughts.
I also like how you kept the stanzas in four-line sets, and then doubled it at the end; it gave it a final bit of impact that I really loved.
Again, overall, a very lovely piece, with a little bit of a twist ending. The rhyme scheme flowed very well.
Excellent job.
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